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Soumitra


25 Mar 2006

Subir
"Hutchcare er sabeki potralap", darun likhechhen lineta. kintu ota to sabeki noy, borong modern potralap. anyokichhu bhaba jay? Otherwise, splendid, as usual.



03:29am 25 Mar

Soumitra
Thanx Subirbabu Oi line ta hobe .....

Nokia Hutchcare er tingtring namabli

Thanx once again

03:52am 25 Mar

Subir
Daruuun, Soumitrada. Great.



04:10am 25 Mar

Chhaya
Bah! bah! Subir dhakkata thikmato dite parle na--ja hok bhalo likhechho--

04:50am 25 Mar

Lipika
Darun laglo Soumitra da.

06:16am 25 Mar

Siddhartha
Fatafati   

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10:12pm 25 Mar

Sukanta
Bhalo laaglo Soumitrada. kebol kichu sobdo niye bhabchilam - jemon Hutchcare. ekhane Hutch sobdo ta ki ekantoi joruri ?? tumi bhalo janbe..

03:41am 26 Mar

Yagnyabolko
Mr. Soumitra

This poem of yours ignites a realisation in me.
The use of certan words like, "sepiya, ringtone, hutch-care, Mehdi Hasan, Pepsi", etc indicates something typical. These words have been deliberately incorporated in this poem inorder to give it a contemporary look. Now my question is, was it really essential? I fully agree to the point that consumerism and influence of western culture have taken their tolls in our day to day living. Agreed. But is it absolutely necessary to write only on these aspects? Whatever poems that you are writing, there seems to be a blending influence, which is deliberately crafted there, eg.,

"Iswaar they swar sob e mascara aalto kamona"
or
"sunsilk er slochul"
or
"collapsible er bhanga bhanga chandanmukh"
or
"sodium vapour er jolrong"
or

-------(many more)

All examples being sited from your poems which were chosen randomly from the archive.

The big question that crops up is, DO YOU CALL THIS INTRODUCTION OF NON-BENGALI WORDS INTO YOUR POEMS AS AN INDICATOR OF SOMETHING "NEW"?

If yes, then the subsequent question is--> WHAT NEW ASPECT DO YOU WANT TO CONVEY?

Only the impact of western culture and consumerism or as a whole New Thoughts. What I have observed is that, its just a formatic gimmic in the way of introduction of some unfamiliar poetic words, but has got nothing new to say from the content aspect.

If your reply is No, the subsequent question is, then why on earth you are taking such a pain to write in this format. I have been a regular reader of your poems, and I don't feel ashamed to convey that those poems which you use to write 3-4 years back (still in the archives of MM) had some punch in them. They were coming directly from your heart (my understanding) and were not tailor made ones like your recent writings. Your recent writings are influenced writings to me and I feel sad when I see a good poet like you getting influenced and loosing your originality. Moreover your recent attempts to influence other fellow poets with your line of thinking, is an alarm in itself.

05:01am 26 Mar

Sohan
oh Soumitrada...eta aami...maney Sohan   

ghabrey jabenna...ektu injirir fuljhurir chesta r ki...kintu maathey mara gelo...eto typos



12:03pm 26 Mar

Soumitra
Sohon,

Bhalo korecho naam-ta bole diye. Ei consumer itemgulo othoba kokhono hindi, urdu ba ingreji shobder byabohar ami amar kobitay ichchhe kore rakhi. Gotokal-e Swapan Roy-o eta bolchilo. Je uttor-ta ami Swapan ke dilam seta tomakeo dichchhi.

Ami kobitay ekta turn ante chai. Seta Bhasay ba chitrokolpe je kono jaygay hote pare ha hothat ekta jhakuni debe. Tobe er beshi byabohar kobita porar agroho noshto kore day e-kothao thik. Jemon ei kobitay hoyeche. Eta swikar korte amar kono lojja nei. Tomar moto hoyto oneker chokhei dhora poreche seta. In facy, ei niye ami Jogajog er madhyom a cheyechila Revised kobita-tao ekhane tule dite. Jate corrections gulo sobar chokhe pore. Er ageo ekbar erokom korechi. Kintu "Admin" patta dilo na.

Aaro ekta byapar ache. Jodio eta Kolkata shohore onek kom, kintu Mumbay ba Delhi ba Bangla-r baire onyo je kono sohorei onyo bhasha theke asa onek shobdo bangla bhasha-r sathe emon bhabe joriye gache je segulo byabohar korei ontoto ami better communicate korte pari. Lokhyo kore dekhechi kichu kichu shabde bangla protishobdo hoyna ba holeo kobitay tar byabohar kora jay na. Jamon "Salma Suhagan" ba "bedard". Tumi "Nirdoy" shobdo-ta khub comfortably kobitay byabohar korte parbe? Salma suhagan er bangla protishobdo ontoto amar jana nei.

Ebar tomar proshner dwitiyo projay asi. Abar sei gotokal er kobita adda-r reference tanchi. Tumi hoyto thik mene nebe na, kintu amar mone hoy Kobita is a process of making. Dhoro Tumi kono feeling convey korte ekta kobita likhecho. Ebong seta re-read, re-re-read korte giye tomar mone holo kothao kobita-ti aaro space ba onyo kothay relief chaiche. Kimba hoyto kobita-r kothao pathok-ke jayga kore dite giye kobita-ta tomar puro feelings-ta convey na korei sesh hoye jete chaiche. Se khetre tomar lekha sei ekta kobita theke 2to ba 3te ba 4te kobita gore uthte pare jegolo ekta serise a tomar original feeling ta carry korbe. Amar mone hoy ete pathok er subidha hobe protiti kobita alada kore bujhte. Egulo ekta serise a hote pare through shironaam. Tomar ki mone hoy?

Soumitrada

01:02am 27 Mar

Sohan
Eii jonyoi apnar songey alochona korar du:sahos dekhai   

Soumitrada,

Aapni Swapanda ke je katha bolechen amaakeO bollen......aar etaO dekha gelo je proshnota eka amar noi.....SwapandarO.....sekhan thekei bolchi....hoito onno keu boltey chaileyO bolcheyna...aami bolchi ...etai basic tofaat...onno bhashar probhaab aastey paarey.....kintu Soumitrada...ekjon pathok jokhon bangla kobita portey aaschey...se kintu janena kobi ke....kobir obosthaan kothai....tokhon "Salma Suhagan" er moto shobdo taar kaachey ekta block hoye uthtei paarey....dhorun na...bangladesh er ekjon pathok....je konodin "bindaas" shobdota shoneni....ba ortho jaaneyna....se jokhon hotath korey bangla kobitai eii shobder sommukhin hobey...tokhon taar ki obosthya hobey   .....seO toh ekjon pathok....ebong bangla kobitaar pathok...taar haater kaachey aapni nei ...kintu aapnar kobita achey....taar icchey korchey onubhutitaakey chnutey ....othocho ekta shobdo taakey badha dicchey...pathok hisebey ki eta ekta chorom frustration noi...bisesh korey aamra jekhaaney jani je protiti shobdo (kobitai) bhishon bhishon daami   

Regarding second part:

Soumitrada....ekta series pathoker pokkhye carry out kora khub muskil....karon sekhaaneyO pathok kintu ekta comperative studytey dhuktey chai......series er kobitagulor ekey oporer modhye competition badhiye dei.....ekta example di.....aami koekdin agey ekta series likhchiilam....."Aami O Aami".....amar kichu onubhutir katha chilo sekhaaney........montobbyo kortey giye beshirbhaag pathok e bolechen....eta bhalo ...ota noi...ota r ota bhalo chilo...eta noi.....taar maaney pathok series ke ekta gota lekha hisebey generally dekheyna......taar modhyeO protyekta lekha ke individually classify korey....ekta comparative study toiri korey.....even aapnar "Dalma" series er khetreyO tai hoyechilo.....tai ekta kobitatei pathok o kobir somporko sesh hoye jaabey...abar notun arekta kobitai abar toiri hoi o abar sesh hoi boley aami mone kori.

Aasoley hoito ...aapnar kobita amaakey aakrishtho korey bolei eto katha bolchi......jekhaaney jor achey sekhaaney jhagra kora jai...torko kora jai boley e aami mone kori.....aar aami nijey boli o biswas kori...eii motobirodh...torko thekei progress achey.......sob hnyatey hnya melaaley aar jaihok egono jaina.....tobey obviously egulo academic aspect......kono personal flavouring keu korley seta dukkhojonok......onnotro dekhlam....aapni eii para charar katha bhaabchen....eta toh thik noi dada......torko toh hobei.....eta toh ekta forum.......aapnar mot aapni bolben...amarta aami.....sob katha misti hobei ba keno   .....jeta aapnar mone hocchey aapni bolun....amarta aami bolbo...ke thik ke bhul seta somoy bolbey...taina  



02:57am 27 Mar

Soumitra
Sohon,

Tomar ekta anubhuti ke jodi ekta mala bhebe neoa jay tobe rar protiti phul amaro bhalo lagbe othoba malata eksathe na dekhleo alada bhabe phul-gulo ami bhalobasbo na ba mala-tai dakhate chai, phulgulo noy eta bhabar ki kono jukti songoto karon ache? Amar mone hoy nei. Protiti kobita pathoker kache ekta "notun abhigyota". Tumi Arghyo Bandopadhyay ke tumi cheno kina jani na. Bochor 25 boyes. Khub bhalo lekhe. O ekbar amar "Tista" serise ta pore bolechilo kano amar sob kobita gulo kothao giye ekrokom. Kintu etao to ekta journey. "Jnaha aanakje khuli, onhi sabera" Let each poem go as a seperate one.

Tumi aaro lokhyo korbe erokom bhabe jodi 5ta kobita lekha hoy tobe sekhane tomar sei original fee;ong er sathe aaro 5ta feelings mishe tomakei ekta notun upolobdhi-r jaygay niye jachchhe jeta kono somoy contradictory to your original one o hote pare. Kintu setao adding to your learning experience, tai na?

Sohon, tomader bhalobasi bolei eto kotha boli. Tomader-o kotha bolate chai jate tomar experience theke onnorao benifited hoy, tader mathay jeno tomar proshno-gulo dhuke pore aar tara nijer moto kore tar uttor khonje. Amat to mone hoy ei mancha ekta adosho jayga ebyapare.

Tobu ekta kotha boli. You shold very carefully choose your words when ever you perticularly wish to contradict someone. Mishtota thakte hobe sob kotha ta noy. Tobe byabohrito kono shobdo jeno slang na hoy. Amar ei anurodh-ta rekho.

Soumitrada

04:01am 27 Mar

Sohan
SIR,
Apnar adesh sirodharyo....tobey aami kintu kono slang sei orthey byabohaar korini...ekta udahoron diyechilam onno ek thread ey...just as it came

  



04:50am 27 Mar

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